Thursday, February 14, 2013

Title your post: JCCS Academic Language Assessment Week 23

Dog fighting should be illegal. For example, dogs should not be treated in such ways to have them fight to the death for ones amusement. This shows that the ones involved with such acts should be sent to jail because the dogs cant POTENTIALLY speak for themselves and say they don't want to do this. This also shows that the dogs should be treated much better because these activity do not benefit the dogs what so ever, only the humans putting these dogs in harm .In addition, people that involve their dog with fighting and the ones who watch it should be taken to because they could stop this DISTINCT act of violence.  This shows that the FORMULA for keeping dogs away from dog fights are going to be hard if there is no authority involved with this matter. This also shows that the more dogs that get rescued, the more people we put behind bars for this act of cruel animal violence. In conclusion, dog fighting should be illegal because they are taking the lives of innocent dogs all around the country.

2 comments:

  1. You did a very good job of providing commentary to support your topic sentence. Work on adding more specific concrete details to strengthen your arguments.

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  2. You have a really strong opinion on this matter and I agree with your decision. Although it does need more concrete details.

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